Drabble: Shard of Glass

[mysid]

Thank you to all of you new participants at sirius_remus100. It's great to see you there. If you haven't joined yet, this week's prompt is "glass". Why don't try your hand at writing a drabble for the prompt?

For my newest drabble, I decided to delve into suspicion.

Title: Shard of Glass
Author: mysid
Prompt: glass
Rating: G
Word Count: 105 (Sorry, I just couldn't cut another word.)
Disclaimer: They all belong to J.K. Rowling.


A shard of glass is stuck in the tread of Remus's boot. A pebble, a crushed leaf, and a small shard of glass that winks at Sirius when a shadow momentarily dims the shaft of sunlight in which the boots lie near the door.

"—but their shield charms were too good," James explains.

Remus is brilliant at shield charms.

"What did you do?" Remus asks.

"Padfoot smashed the big shop window behind them. The glass raining down distracted them, and we stunned two."

And two got away.

"Clever puppy," Remus says fondly.

A shard of glass is stuck in the tread of Remus's boot.
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Comments

[secretsolitaire.livejournal.com]

Gah. Poor pups. :-( Like all good drabbles, this is only a few words but manages to capture a whole web of backstory. Nice one!

I didn't get this till the second readthrough, but that's more due to my own lack of attention the first time than to any weakness in the writing.

[mysid.livejournal.com]

Thanks, but you're the second person to say that it took two read-throughs. Hmm... Oh well, I guess as long as you do get it on the second read-through, that's OK.

[secretsolitaire.livejournal.com]

I think part of it is that when I'm reading my flist, I tend to skim (or at least read quickly), and I often miss details. I'm probably not the only reader who does this. All the info you need to understand your drabble is there, but you have to read it slowly enough to see it and comprehend it.

I can't find the quote now, so forgive me if I misremember it, but I read somewhere that someone once complained to Toni Morrison that they always had to read her paragraphs more than once to understand them. Morrison replied, "That's called reading." :-)